The Air I breathe
brews inside me
into a passionate storm.
The Waters of the ocean
evoke in me
a deep silent longing.
Earth, the eternal charmer,
She beckons me
to her far corners.
Someday I will fly
and become Queen
of the unconquered Sky
The Fire burns-
I live.
I live-
The Fire burns.
Tag: 55 word poem
PS: Thanx to . : A : .
36 comments:
I am truly impressed!!!!
Awesome play with the elements, especially the last line.
Brilliant play with the elements as pointed out by Casablanca!
Earth, really is the eternal charmer.
I luv this one..!!
hey this is really cool
Great stuff
Cheers
Incredibly beautiful. You really have an amazing way of weaving a wonderful story in so few words... I am truly envious!
you give people a complex. our festival here was on these lines. or tried to be.
Good one
Like this very much, wanted to set up a link but can't find your URL? If you don't mind me doing that would you let me know what it is
NICE one!!!u have a cool blog out here ...
thanks for droping by my blog though
simply awesome!!!
This is very, very good. I like the stanza with fire. Very strong stuff.
Elemental inspirations!Beautiful!
Hey, good job again!
impressed!!!!
wow...awesome yet simple...its really nice
Is it the weather? Is it the weekend syndrome? or is it really that I suck @ Directions? *scratches head*
nice adaptation of the idea of using the 5 elements within the limited words.
Elemental! and fiery to the least! loved the idea and the composition..et all!
:))
the magical elements, left much completed with you in the center.
That is really lovely :)
wonderful , the elements !
amazing...the elements have been potrayed in a wonderfully simple manner.but the composition is excellent..
southpaw: thanx
Casablanca: thanx and the last line's my fav too
. : A : .: true and thanx for the tag
hari: thanx
Puneet: thanx
Justin Thyme: that's a HUGE compliment! thanx
consumerdemon: oh really, i know how well u can write. modest eh?
Mrudula: thanx
Sue hardy-Dawson said...
Like this very much, wanted to set up a link but can't find your URL? If you don't mind me doing that would you let me know what it is
goodwill hunting: thanx and do visit agn
shaurya vaani: thanx
Enemy of the Republic: thanx. i like that stanza too
Ramchi: thanx
velvetgunther: thanx!
@archie@: thanx and come back for more :)
mysterygal: thanx
arvindiyer: a li'l bit of everything
Ram: thanx
Pincushion: thanx
Sreekesh Menon: really? thanx!
ash: thanx
EUPHORIC DREAMZ: thanx
jaded : glad u liked it. thanx!
5 elements and 55 words...
awesome...
nice :)
Lovely... I esp love the end! "Burning, burning" - The Wasteland :)
gr88 one!!
hey time for new post...
cheers
I loved the haikus, very well thought site
hey miss....thanx for the appraisal...and seeing your work here,i guess i will have to become a regular visitor.... :)
wow i love this poem. magical is how it sounds.
i love how you used nature's elements. "become Queen of the unconquered Sky" how dreamy.
lovely.
really neat stuff. N d number of visitors/comments you have makes me feel utterly envious...
Beautiful and powerful!
You've captured the magic of the elements so well.
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